Song & Music Ideas

[Rhythm N. Bliss]

I've written a lot of songs which may not be worth recording but they'll still go into a book of lyrics & poetry someday.
Any other songwriters here? Maybe you've just been thinking about making a song & have only a title or a few good words or a piece of a piece of music that you'd like to share or maybe you have dozens like me!!!!
Put 'em here & get some feedback! Let's not be TOO brutal with our comments, ok?
Don't wanna scare anyone away!
Let's keep our criticism constructive if possible.
This is my latest song, which probly WILL get recorded!  

ROAD RAGE


(Real HEAVY Heavy Metal---DUNH DUHN da da DUHN * DUHN DUHN)


ROAD RAGE
makes ya do crazy things
when traffic makes you feel like a BEAST in a CAGE
& some WASP-like driver STINGS
Sometimes I wish I had a gun
but then I'd probly KILL someone


If I had a gun I would use it
I'd shoot out the tires of the BIG SHOTS with BIG TRUCKS
It's goood to be left handed. Ha!
They cut you off & try to run you off the road
They're some kind of EVIL F***S!


(MUSIC gets m-e-l-l-o-w, with sitar & tablas)


I'm learning to be kind & sweet & gentle
Yes, I'm becoming a real GENTLEman
a real pleasant fellow
My guru sings so nice & mellow
I'm following in his footsteps
controlling my ANGER, lust & greed by meditation
& the path of devotion


(POWER CHORD)
(music stays mellow but builds in inTENSITY)
But on my way home from sitar class
I got HONKED AT by some stupid ass
He flipped me off as he drove past
& yelled obscenities

(More POWER CHORDS & back to FULL-on METAL!)


So I threw a big handful of pennies
at his brand spankin' new Mercedes
Then I took an exit he couldn't make

(Brief return to mellowness)

Hey~ I overeacted
I guess it was a mistake
Maybe he learned a good lesson tho
I don't know haha

(METAL AGAIN)

ROAD RAGE
makes ya do crazy things
when traffic makes you feel like a beast in a cage
& some wasp-like driver stings
Sometimes I wish I had a gun
but then I'd probly kill someone

Kinda FUN!
Not a true story btw  

[fur85]

I like it. I especially like this verse:

But on my way home from sitar class
I got HONKED AT by some stupid ass
He flipped me off as he drove past
& yelled obscenities

[Rhythm N. Bliss]

Thanks! I know it's silly but it's got dynamics.  
I've been criticized for being too rhymey. Blimey!
I've tried not to rhyme too much in songs but I  guess that's just part of my goofy style.

[Rhythm N. Bliss]

Spent all day Sun. in Traffic School & it was interesting to note that when a vid was shown about Road Rage & there was a story of a woman being shot in the face & killed by another woman everyone gasped with horror but then when a guy commented on it that he would have got out & shot her again to make sure she was dead, everyone laffed!

Workin' on a Blues song with the mindset that it's gotta fully express what livin' in this world is all about. Hope it doesn't make people commit suicide.

Only one verse so far:

Cruel World Blues

Whatever you do in this world, it all seems so FUTILE
There's danger at every step & the ways we get CLOBBERED are BRUTAL!
If you live long enuf to get old, it becomes HARD to even just get by
& what doesn't get taken by taxes is taken away when you DIE!
It's a CRUEL, CRUEL WORLD --& I'll be happy to tell it GOODBYE

Havin' fun with the bass on this one. It's BASSed on SRV's Tin Pan Alley--a real S-L-O-W G-R-O-O-V-E